from Steelwindhorse

Message 2929 of 6476

SWH asked me to post this for him as he is very busy..I wish he would have it means more coming from the poet. So here it is.

Obvious Oblivion

One step at a time into the void we go

Taking time to savor each breath

While the body weaves its sinewy magic

Doing what we do best

Cavort where the wild things are

And best each other in a leap frog

Game of checkers

Overheating the sky like

The burning fires of creation

Every BTU we shed is another minute off our Earth

And Gaia sheds another tear

Washing more ominous jelly fish to the shore

A president eats Chinese food at the tune of $300 Billion

Representing the few

The proud

The machines.

Our children come back in pieces and bags

While others are born into a state of terror

Like we as Yankees will never know

Assuming we are right and running the show

While H1N1 makes me not like bacon?

STD, HIV, 1-2-3 baby you and me

And all I want to do is crawl back to the sea.

Father sun, sister moon make me spin to your cycles

Reminding me that each pulse is a chance to renew

For the one thing I know in my momentary existence

I am here for a reason

Not just a season

Counting like every grain of sand

To make a whole

A part of a universal

Obvious oblivion

11.17.09 steelwindhorse

posted by Pajarito

Well, you made sure we knew it was his.

It is powerful regardless, and beautifully crafted.

Ever the optimist and believer i am drawn to these lines:

"Father sun, sister moon make me spin to your cycles

Reminding me that each pulse is a chance to renew

For the one thing I know in my momentary existence

I am here for a reason"

posted by feywon
over 2 years ago

Very powerful, but whats more, it is the kind of poem that demands thinking on the part of the reader. Well crafted and provocative! Thanx steelwindhorse!

posted by desertshaman
over 2 years ago

I resonated with it up until the obvious oblivion part ...

posted by BarbInBend
over 2 years ago

This needs to be read and re-read. Very powerful piece.

posted by JaneCrichton
over 2 years ago

hm interesting comments, smiling especially at the well crafted statement, I actually wrote it in three minutes......... ty for the thoughts. Richard

posted by Steelwindhorse
over 2 years ago

Richard, time is irrelevant to quality. There have poems people agonized over and revised 20 times that still fell short.

Often the ideas have been rumbling around one's brain, and then something triggers a thought and suddenly several phrases are dancing around and it all just works. But that's becuase the more we write and think the more we train our brain to go to those poetic phrasings to express ideas. Like anything else, doing it makes it easier to do well.

posted by feywon
over 2 years ago

I agree with feywon about how the thoughts we have been coddling and stroking seem to find a way to be expressed sometimes even without us being too aware how it did it.