Debra from this one piece it is clear you know what you are doing. I love the immediacy of your descriptions of people around you, leading to the expression of your true feelings.
To me, the real end of the poem is "Wondering when I can rest." The emotions/situation described to this point are so powerful and real, it somehow seems a letdown when the poet replies to herself to the effect, "Well, things will get better." I know this is true, but as a dramatist I guess I like to keep people wondering what might happen next. I also find that when I am in the frame of mind "Wondering when I can rest," I really can't see past this moment into future recovery, so I personally would rather let the recovery part remain unspoken.
Let me know if this makes any sense to you or not.
-ST
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ty for the comments, and in trueth I don't know if or when things well get better, however being a survior, I know that what ever difficulties one has to traverse trough you will either get use to it or it will get better.
Things will get better. I have been through so much myself...some very dark hours when I could see no light at the end of the tunnel at all. Then it comes.
Hang in there! I am mostly spending my time at Good Vibrations...please feel free to jump over!
The solution is to make new friends and family. You will also find more to write about.
Debra, I have no friends in the flesh since I have moved to a new town and state. The friends I have made on eons seem to be enough for now. We welcome you. I understand the poem and the feelings. Today, I am weraing something yellow, which always lifts my spirits. Maybe you have something or somewhere that makes you feel good. I also feel good at an outdoor cafe, anywhere I find one. Preferably with an umbrella table.
This is quite a thought provoking piece. Writing can be helpful in any situation. I hope that you are not THAT down. It is hard to see your circle of friends get smaller, but try to look out and see all the other people there are to know in the world. Definitely get out of the house regularly. If nothing else, see the movie Pursuit of Happyness. After that, your life will definitely look better! It sounds like you know how to write very well, congrats. So many people can't communicate. We, who like to write are lucky.
Let us see more of your talent!
thanks all for the comments, they are greatly appreciated. writing has become easir with a spell checker, otherwise no one would be able to read or understand what i wrote.
Unfortunatly I have been housebound and without this world of bits and bytes I would be in a terrible perdicament. It is though the expressions in my poetry, which tend to run on the dark side, I would indead be invisible. AND a good movie always makes one feel better.
